Thursday 5 November 2015

Yellow By Lily R


                       Yellow
            by Lily R

   On yellow days
        I feel happy
     like melting butter
on chocolate chip pancakes
on cold foggy mornings


  

8 comments:

  1. Hi Lily R,
    I like chocolate pancakes as well especially when it has melting butter on top, Chocolate pancakes on foggy mornings will definitely make me feel very yellow.

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  2. Hello Lily R, i like chocolate chip pancakes too ! i think yellow makes me feel happy as well.

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  3. Hi Lily R
    I wrote about yellow too, go have a look

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  4. Hi lily.R,
    I like your poem and sometimes I feel like that

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  5. Hallå Lily
    I feel happy on yellow days to and chocolate chip pancakes with melting butter on it to maybe you could make a pitcher in the background.

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  6. Bonjour Lily,
    I like how you are adding all these different descriptive words which makes me get a really good picture in my mind. I see you are connecting to some of your previous times on foggy days with pancakes. My poetry isn't too good maybe you be an expert for me, could you?

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  7. Hi Lily.R,
    I liked how you used describing words. It was really interesting and it drew a picture in my head.

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  8. Hi Lily R
    I like you wrote about yellow. It was about how you feel and what you imagined and you used adjectives.

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